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=Ellen Kuhl's Critical Paper=

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January 29 — folder and parent signature due
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January 30 — note cards due
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January 31 — select a topic
View a list of potential paper topics: Choose a topic for your paper and type it here: (5 points)
 * Holden uses fantasy to escape reality and fulfill wishes**

February 4 — thesis due
Your thesis tells your readers what point you will be making and defending about the novel. For a guide to writing your thesis (and some examples) click here. __Write your thesis here__: is this good?? cause im still a liitle confused on how to write this thesis. help me!!
 * In the novel, //The Catcher in the Rye//, by J.D Salinger, Holden does a lot of fantasizing. He fantasizes to fulfill his wishes and to escape the harsh reality. The main things he fantasizes about are running away, death, and being a catcher in the rye.**

(5 points)

Your three main body topics are the main topics you will use to defend your thesis. You should use at least three different subtopics (main bodies) to defend your thesis in the paper. Many students use 4, 5, or even more main body topics to organize their papers. THREE IS JUST A MINIMUM.

__Please enter (at least) three main body topics here__: (5 points)

1)running away 2)death 3)being a catcher in the rye

February 6 — introductory paragraph due
Your intro paragrpah tells your readers the thesis of your paper, and briefly outlines the main body paragraph topics you will use to prove and defend your thesis. __Type **(or link to)** your Introductory Paragraph here__: (10 points)
 * "We live in a fantasy world, a world of illusion. The great task in life is to find reality." That was said by Iris Murdoch. She is right. We all have some sort of fantasy, and we get so stuck in our fantasy world that we don't see what is real, what the reality is. And sometimes it's very hard to find reality once were in our fantasy world. The reason is because our fantasies are what we want and what we wish for, and sometimes the reality doesn't have that. So, we stay in our fantasy to keep what we want alive. In the novel, //The Catcher in the Rye//, by J.D Salinger, Holden does a lot of fantasizing. He fantasizes to fulfill his wishes and to escape the harsh reality that he doesn't like. He fantasizes about things teenagers wouldn't normally fantasize about like running away, death and pain, and being a catcher in the rye.**

February 7 — critical articles (secondary sources) due
You need at least three secondary sources (essays or articles about the novel written by professional critics) from which you will quote the words of the author/critic to help defend your thesis. __List the titles and authors of your three secondary sources here__: (5 points)

1) The Saint as a Young Man: A Reappraisal of The Catcher in the Rye - Jonathan Baumbach 2) The Fallen Idol: The Immature World of Holden Caulfield - Peter J. Seng 3) In Memoriam: Allie Caulfield in //The Catcher in the Rye// //- Edwin Haviland Miller//


 * NOTE**: It is a good idea to find more than three articles in case you change your mind about using one of them. Remember, your final paper must have a total of 8-15 quotes from these secondary sources to help you make your point and defend your thesis. These eight quotes must come from at least three different secondary sources.

February 8 — secondary source quotes
Using each of your three articles at least once, select at least 8 details or quotes from your articles to defend thesis. YOU MUST LIST THE QUOTE, THE SOURCE OF THE QUOTE, AND THE MAIN BODY TOPIC OF YOUR PAPER WHERE YOU WILL USE THE QUOTE. __List at least eight quotes from secondary sources here__: (5 points)

1) QUOTE: he decides to become a deaf-mute, to live alone in an isolated cabin, to commit a kind of symbolic suicide. it is an unrealizible fantasy, but a death wish nonetheless TITLE & PAGE: The Saint as a Young Man: A Reappraisal of The Catcher in the Rye, pg. 463 AUTHOR: Baumbach SUBTOPIC: death

2) QUOTE: when he discovers an obscenity scrawled on one of the walls of Phoebe's school, he rubs it out with his hand to protect the innocence of the children. for the moment he is a successful catcher in the rye. but then he discovers another such notice, "scratched on, with a knife or something",...he realizes that he cannot possibly erase all the scribbled obscenities in the world, that he cannot catch all the children, that evil is ineradicable. TITLE & PAGE: The Saint as a Young Man: A Reappraisal of The Catcher in the Rye, pg. 464 AUTHOR: Baumbach SUBTOPIC: being a catcher in the rye

3) QUOTE: Holden's cheif fantasy is built on this memory: he sees himself as the "catcher in the rye", the only adult in a world of children. TITLE & PAGE: The Fallen Idol: The Immature World of Holden Caulfield, pg.204 AUTHOR: Seng SUBTOPIC: being a catcher in the rye

4) QUOTE: he imagines himself living all alone in a cabin in the far west pretending to be a deaf-mute. if anyone wanted to communicate with him, he says, that person would have to write him a note....both the "catcher " and the "deaf-mute" fantasies are rooted in a single desire: a wish to escape from an adult world with which Holden feels that he cannot cope. TITLE & PAGE: The Fallen Idol: The Immature World of Holden Caulfield, pg. 204-205 AUTHOR: Seng SUBTOPIC: running away

5) QUOTE: roughed up by a pimp-bellhop he imangines that he has been shot, and fancies walking down the stairs of the hotel bleeding to death...he imagines his own death and funeral in great detail. TITLE & PAGE: The Fallen Idol: The Immature World of holden Caulfield, pg. 205 AUTHOR: Seng SUBTOPIC: death

6) QUOTE: when Holden "hears" anticipates the grandiose fantasy he will later relate to Phoebe in which he catches and saves children. for a moment he is charmed with his fantasy of a self-contained kid whose parents are at hand to protect him:"It made me feel not so depressed anymore." TITLE & PAGE: In Memoriam: Allie Caulfield in The Catcher in the Rye, pg. 134 AUTHOR: Miller SUBTOPIC: being a catcher in the rye

7) QUOTE: "Still shivering like a bastard", he imagines that he has pneumonia and dies. TITLE & PAGE: In Memoriam: Allie Caulfield in The Catcher in the Rye, pg. 135 AUTHOR: Miller SUBTOPIC: death

8) QUOTE: in his fantasy he acts out his anger against his parents and inflicts upon them the ultimate punishment, his death. his funeral is mobbed and everybody cries...like allie he will lie in the cementary exposed to the elements. TITLE & PAGE: AUTHOR: Miller SUBTOPIC: death

(Feel free to add additional quotes here, using the same format as above)
 * theres more on my notecards**

February 11 — primary source quotes
Please select at least 10 details from the novel to defend thesis Feb 11 __List them here__: (5 points)

1) QUOTE: "I think I'm going blind," I said in this very hoarse voice. "Mother, darling, everything's getting so dark in here."..."Mother darling, give me your hand. Why won't you give me your hand?" PAGE NUMBER:21 SUBTOPIC: death

2) QUOTE: "It isn't very serious. I have this tiny little tumor on the brain."..."Oh, I'll be alright and everything. It's right near the outside. And it's a very tiny one. They can take it out in about 2 minutes." PAGE NUMBER: 57 SUBTOPIC: death

3) QUOTE: I'd rather push a guy out the window or chop his head off with an ax than sock him in the jaw. I ate fist fights. I don' mind getting hit so much...but wha scares me most in a fist fight is the guy's face. PAGE NUMBER: 89+90 SUBTOPIC: death

4) QUOTE: About halfway to the bathroom, I sort of started pretending I had a bullet in my guts. ... I'd hold onto the banister and all, with this blood trickling out of the side of my mouth a little at a time. I'd walk down a few floors - holding onto my guts, blood leaking all over the place - and then I'd ring the elevator bell. As soon as old Maurice opened the doors, he'd see me with the automatic in my hand...But I'd plug him anyway. Six shots right through his fat hariy belly. PAGE NUMBER:103+104 SUBTOPIC: death

5) QUOTE: "If a body catch a body coming through the rye." It made me feel better. It made me feel not so depressed any more. PAGE NUMBER:115 SUBTOPIC: being a catcher in the rye

6) QUOTE: "...What we could do is, tomarrow we could drive up to Massachusetts and Vermont, and all around there, see. ...I have about a hundred and eight bucks in the bank. I can take it out when it opens in the morning, and then I could go down and get the guy's car. We'll stay in these cabin camps and stuff like that till the dough runs out. Then when thedough runs out, I could get a job somewhere and we could get married or somethig. I could chop all our qown wood in the winter time and all. ..." PAGE NUMBER: 132 SUBTOPIC: running away

7) QUOTE: I swear if there's ever another war, they better just take me out and stick me in the front of a firing squad. I wouldn't object. PAGE NUMBER: 141 SUBTOPIC: death

8) QUOTE: ...I started that stupid business with the bullet in my guts again. I was the only guy at the bar with a bullet in their guts. I kept putting my hand under my jacket, on my stomach and all, to keep the blood from dripping all over the place. I didn't want anybody to know I was even wounded. PAGE NUMBER: 150 SUBTOPIC: death

9) QUOTE: Finally, what he did, instead of taking back what he said, he jumped out the window. ...He was dead, and his teeth, and blood, were all over the place, and nobody would even go near him. PAGE NUMBER: 170 SUBTOPIC: death

10) QUOTE: "Anyway, I keep picturing all these little kids playing some game in this big field of rye and all. Thousands of little kids, and nobody's around - nobody big - except me. And I'm standing on the edge of some crazy cliff. What I have to do, I have to catch everybody if they start to go over the cliff - I mean if they're running and they don't look where they're going I have to come out from somewhere and catch them. That's what I'd do all day. I'd just be the catcher in the rye. ..." PAGE NUMBER: 173 SUBTOPIC: being a catcher in the rye

(Feel free to add additional quotes here, using the same format as above)
 * there's more on my notecards**

February 12 — outline your main body
Please arrange your 10 primary source quotes and your 8 secondary source quotes into an outline of the body of your critical paper. In other words, list the quotes in the order you will use them under each main body topic.

If you use a word document to do this, this could become the framework for your actual paper (because you could type your own writing in between the quotes after you've arranged them in order in this outline, thus creating a draft of your actual paper).

__Please post **(or link to)** a word document containing the outline of your main body (everything but your intro and conclusion) here:__ (5 points) LINK ON TOP OF PAGE

February 19 — first draft of main body
Write a draft of the body of your paper for peer review.

Please create a link to this first draft, calling it (YOURNAME)'S FIRST DRAFT, as a __new__ wiki page. Ask __at least three__ of your classmates to __read__ your draft (you might need to tell them where to find it by emailing them a link). Students will be expected to read each other's drafts __and leave comments__ in the discussion board. (10 points) http://8thperiod.wikispaces.com/Ellen+Kuhl%27s+first+draft hope this works

February 20 — peer review
__List the names of at least three of your classmates whose first drafts you read and commented upon:__ (5 points)

1) Tasha Valor 2) Brittany McCauley 3) Joy Mayfield

At this point, begin revising your draft and come up with a second rough draft.

February 25 — final rough draft
Submit a paper copy of your final draft of the body to the teacher. (20 points)

February 26 — rough draft of conclusion paragraph
__Please type **(or link to)** the rough draft of your conclusion paragraph here__: (5 points)
 * Holden's main fantasises are about running away, death, pain and sickness, and being a catcher in the rye. Not something a normal teenager would fantasize about. His fantasises about running away show that he wants to be cut off from the world and all the phony adults in it. His fantasises about death, pain, and sickness show that he either wants to kill the people who are phonies or he wants himself to die so he doesn't have to deal with the phonies in the world. And his fantasises about being a catcher in the rye show that he likes children, and he wants them to stay children for as long as possible. He can't stand adults and he doesn't want the children in the world to become one. Although these fantasises seem a little weird, they are helping Holdento grow up, and to become what he fears, an adult. In the end, he may have weird fantasies, but he's still a good person on the inside.**

February 27 — final draft of conclusion paragraph
Revise your conclusion paragraph and present a copy to your teacher today. __Also, please type **(or link to)** the rough draft of your conclusion paragraph here__:
 * Holden's main fantasises are about running away, death, pain and sickness, and being a catcher in the rye, which is not something a normal teenager would fantasize about. His fantasises about running away show that he wants to be cut off from the world and all the phony adults in it. His fantasises about death, pain, and sickness show that he either wants to kill the people who are phonies or he wants himself to die so he does not have to deal with the phonies in the world. And his fantasises about being a catcher in the rye show that he likes children, and he wants them to stay children for as long as possible. He cannot stand adults and he does not want the children in the world to become adults. Although these fantasises seem a little strange, they help Holden get past the pain of growing up and becoming what he fears most: an adult. In the end, he may have fantasies, but he is still a good person on the inside.**

(10 points)

February 28 — Works Cited Page due
Turn in a paper copy of your works cited page to your teacher today! __Link to the Word document of your works cited page here__: on top of page (20 points)

March 5 — CRITICAL PAPER DUE!!!
Turn in the final draft of critical paper TODAY, including: a) note cards b) outline of body c) all rough drafts d) completed checklist, signed e) final draft of paper, typed, double spaced (5-7 pgs.) f) final works cited / references page

(100 points)

March 9 — TURN IT IN (dot com)
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 * __FAILURE TO SUBMIT YOUR PAPER TO TURNITIN.COM WILL RESULT IN A ZERO ON YOUR PAPER!__**

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